Sorrow with the Storm

 by Elizabeth Thompkins


I have to get to the barn. I have to save her. I have to. I have to. 

These thoughts whirled through the young girl´s mind as she raced to the barn. Cold, harsh winds pushed against her as though it did not want her to make it in time while that dark night loomed overhead. The girl ran harder. As punishment, the wind whipped her hair against her face, causing a stinging pain. 

Almost there. I have to save her. The wind angrily banged the barn doors open and closed and the young girl drew near. She could now hear the stomping of hoofs and the frightened whinny of horses inside. It was as if they could sense the approaching semblance of death coming closer and closer. 

Gotta make it in time. Gotta save her. There! She was in the barn and racing down the aisle, passing horse after horse until she made it to the stall she was after. The white quarter horse lay on the ground, sides not moving. The young girl’s heart stopped in her chest as she gazed at the unmoving horse. She crumpled to her knees as tears welled up in her eyes. 

I-I failed. 


Earlier that morning

¨Don’t forget, Andi, I want all the stalls mucked out by the time Mitch and I get back tomorrow morning.¨ Chad looked down at 14-year-old Andi Carter from where he sat upon his gelding, Sky. He glanced up at the grey, December sky as dark clouds began to bunch together. ¨Looks like rains comin´. Make sure you don´t leave any horses out in the storm, especially not Snowflake. Her foal will be due in a couple of weeks, and I don´t want anything to happen to her.¨

¨Anything else you would like me to do?¨ Andi sarcastically asked. ¨Want me to do your laundry and clean up your bedroom as well?¨

¨Just do what I said and don´t get into trouble¨ Chad grumbled. Even though he acted grumpily, Andi could see the corners of his mouth twitch at the beginning of a smile. 

 Andi watched as her brothers turned their horses and began galloping down the road. ¨Don`t let the barn door hit you on the way out¨ she called after them.

Mitch let out a whoop of laughter, and Chad waved his hat in reply. 

She waited for them to ride out of sight before she went back into the barn. They wouldn´t be gone long, only until the next morning. They had to go attend a cattle auction in a neighboring town. Normally, they wouldn´t go, but a family that just moved to the area with whom Chad was acquainted asked for his help in purchasing cattle. So Chad and Mitch decided to go.

Andi had wanted to go as well, but Mother had firmly said no. ¨You have chores and responsibility here, Andrea¨ she said. 

¨Like the mucking can´t wait for a day,¨ Andi mumbled as she pushed the wheelbarrow into the first stall. After about a total of five minutes of scooping muck, Andi felt like she was going to scream. ¨I`m going to die of boredom!¨ Glancing at the wheelbarrow, she thought, It will still be here later… I`ll just go for a quick ride. 

Racing out of the stall, she ran outside and to the paddock fence where her palamino mare was grazing. She let out a long whistle and shouted, ¨here girl! Come´ere Taffy!¨ Gazing around the field, she saw her beautiful golden horse loping towards her. Taffy came to a halt besides Andi and began to nicker a greeting. ¨Ready to go for a ride, pretty girl?¨ 

 Andi jumped onto Taffy, not caring that she was currently riding bareback, and broke off into gallop. Then wind played with her hair, blowing it behind Andi as she raced across the moorland. In what seemed like minutes, but was truthfully about an hour, they made it to Andi`s favorite spot on the ranch. 

 The creek flowed swiftly by Andi and Taffy as it wound its way around the few trees that dotted the hillside. It bubbled over stones, making a soothing gurgling sound. 

 ¨Hang it all, Taffy! I should have brought my fishing pole!¨ The golden mare snorted her agreement, then bent her head down and began to graze. ¨I should have also brought a coat. Who knew it would be so nippy?¨ 

 Andi glanced up at the sky as she said ¨If only these clouds weren’t covering up the sun. Now I don´t know what time it is.¨ With a sigh, she turned and looked at Taffy. ¨I suppose we should head back.¨ Taffy stomped her foot in obvious displeasure but stood still as Andi climbed on. ¨Lets go, girl!¨

 The ride back felt even quicker than the one going up, and in no time, they made it back to the ranch. As they rode up, a stablehand walked up to her and said, ¨Oh, there you are, Miss Andi! Your mother was lookin´ for you a bit ago. Somthin´ about lunch?¨ 

¨Oh no!¨ Dread filled Andi as she realized how late it must be. ¨I didn´t realize I had been out that long! Would you mind giving Taffy a brush down and putting her in her stall? Thanks!¨ Without waiting for a reply, Andi slid off Taffy and raced to the house. 

  Stopping by the water pump, she quickly scrubbed her face and took out her messy braids before entering the dining room. Sitting at the table were Melinda and a very displeased Mother.

 ¨Nice of you to finally join us, Andrea¨ Mother said.

 With a gulp, Andi slid into her place and mumbled, ¨Sorry I am late Mother. I didn´t realize how late it had gotten.¨ 

 ¨You’re supposed to be mucking out the barn today, where you not?¨ Mother looked at Andi and tilted her head in that way that made her feel as if all her deepest darkest secrets were being found out. 

 ¨I… Um… Yes ma´am…¨ Andi stammered. ¨I can do it this afternoon, though!¨

 ¨That you will Andrea. You will muck out every stall until they sparkle.¨


By the time Andi had finished mucking out all the stalls, the wind had begun howling and the rain began to fall. She now sat in the loft listening to the rain thrum against the barn roof. Pitter patter. Pitter patter. 

Andi gazed out the loft window at the downpour inches away from her face. 

I´m glad I´m up here where it’s dry she thought. I would hate to be out in that storm. It’s a good thing the horses are all in their nice… warm… 

¨Oh no!¨ With a jolt similar to being struck by lightning, Andi felt horror and dread sink to the bottom of her stomach as she realized she had forgotten to put the horses back in their stalls. 

Quicker thank you can say Chad is gonna kill me, Andi was down the ladder and out the barn doors, racing towards the pasture where the horses were held. She let out a long, loud whistle as she clambered over the fence.

¨Com´ere Frisco! Here Peaches! Snowflake, over this way!¨ The howling wind seemed to swallow every word she yelled. No matter how hard she screamed, no horses came near. 

Snowflake´s baby could die in this wet cold! And it would be all my fault! 

Despair hung over her head like the thick rain clouds pouring down icy droplets of water. ¨Snowflake!!¨ she screamed with all her lungs. 

Suddenly, a hand landed on her shoulder. Letting out a little eep of terror, Andi whirled around to see who had snuck up on her. ¨I already put them in their stalls, Miss Andi¨ the ranch hand who had scared her so badly said. ¨Snowflake was the first one I put in. She is safe and dry in her stall.¨

Letting out a whoosh of air, Andi sagged in relief. ¨Thank you so much.¨ She thought she might hug him she was so relieved. ¨I don´t know what I would have done if anything had happened to Snowflake.¨

¨No problem, Miss Andi. I would do anything for the horses. ¨ He glanced down at Andi´s soaking figure and said, ¨You should probably head inside. You must be chilled to the bone, not to mention it is getting dark.¨

¨Good idea,¨ Andi mumbled. Only now had she realized how bone-tired she was. All she wanted now was a warm bathtub and a comfy bed. ¨Goodnight¨ she said as she turned and walked away.

¨G´night Miss Andi.¨

Rushing through the front door, Andi raced upstairs and into the bathing room. As she entered, she saw with joy that someone had already drawn the warm water in the bathtub. Quickly stripping off her soggy clothes, Andi sank into the steamy tub and relished the feel of heat on her skin, thawing her from the inside out. 

 As soon as she finished her bath and put on her night clothes, she headed to her room and went straight to her bed. Climbing under the covers, Andi snuggled down deep into her fluffy comforter. As soon as her head hit the pillow, she was fast asleep.


Andi sat up. Something had woken her. Was it the storm raging outside her bedroom window? No… That was not it. What else could have woken her in the middle of the night? There! Very faint, Andi could hear the sound of a horse whinnying and banging against its stall. Normally, this would have not bothered Andi; It was normal for horses to do that in the middle of a storm. But still, something felt off about it.

Sliding out of bed, Andi slipped on her clothes and boots from earlier that day and headed out her bedroom door, and down the stair. Creeping on tiptoes as to not wake anybody, she slowly made her way to the back door.

As soon as she stepped outside, she was greeted by howling wind and freezing rain. Trudging through the storm, Andi slowly worked her way to the barn. By the time she made it to the big barn doors, she was soaked yet again to the bone. 

Now that she was closer, she could hear the horse who was making all the racket even clearer. She headed down the aisle towards the noise. Quickly, she made it down the aisle of horses and stopped at the last stall. Looking in she saw, ¨Oh no!¨

Snowflake, belly heavy with a foal, was banging against her stall door, sides slick with sweat. The whites of her eyes were showing and she tossed her head up and down, snorting all the while. The white mare let out a whinny of pain and then nosed her belly while ripples ran down her sides. 

Andi felt sick with horror. ¨No, no, no, no, no! You’re not supposed to have your foal for a couple of weeks! You’re supposed to have it when Chad is around so he can safely deliver it, not me!¨ Snowflake replied with another whinny, then collapsed to the ground with a thud. Despair clung to Andi like a cloak. She couldn´t just watch the horse suffer in pain. She would save her! 

Tearing into a run, Andi raced out of the barn and ran towards the house. Her mind went through the list of items she would need to deliver. She had seen many horses give birth before, so she knew what to get. 

Finally reaching the house, she bolted through the door not caring if she woke anybody. She glanced at the big clock as she raced by; 4:08 AM. Opening the linen closet, Andi grabbed as many towels as she could. Then she raced over to the pump in the sink and scrubbed her hands clean. That completed, Andi sped back to the front door. 

The storm seemed to have gotten worse when she was inside. Sleet was pouring down, soaking her before she had even stepped off the porch. The wind that had seemed so playful earlier that day was a beast now. For every step Andi took forwards, it shoved her back two. 

You can’t stop me, she mutinously thought. I have to save her. I have to. The wind howled back, seeming to laugh at her petty struggles to reach the barn. Undaunted, Andi pushed ran harder. I have to make it to the barn. I have to save Snowflake. 

Finally, she made it to the barn. Andi noticed as she entered that all the horses seemed to be restless; pacing around and tossing their heads. The one thing she didn’t notice was the unusual silence coming from the stall at the back of the barn.

Andi headed straight for that stall. Only when she was a few feet away did she notice how quiet the stall had become. Flinging open the door, she looked down and saw Snowflake on the ground. Not moving. Not breathing. Just lying there. 

¨No no no no no No NO!! No God!! Please don´t have her be dead!!¨ As if an answer to prayer, the white mare drew in a shuddering breath as her sides rippled. Andi threw herself next to her and began to massage the horse’s stomach. ¨Com´on girl. You can do it.¨ 

After a few minutes of struggling, Snowflake began to push the little foal out. Andi switched to the rear end to help. A hoof stuck out. Then another. Andi gripped the hoofs and gently pulled. Soon, a little tail poked out. ¨Oh no! Its head should be coming out first!¨ She tugged harder. Snowflake let out a sharp whinny of pain and Andi realized that only one horse would make it out alive. 

¨Push girl, push!¨ With a heave, the mare pushed the little foal farther out. Bit by bit, the foal slowly began to show. As soon as it popped out, Andi broke the sack it was trapped in and began to rub it fiercely with towels to warm it up. When she got to its head and began to rub its neck, it looked up at her with soft brown eyes, let out the tiniest of nicker that seemed to say, ¨I trust you,¨ and gave its last breath.

Sorrow clutched her heart and squeezed it until she thought it might burst. Tears began to fall down her face like the raging storm outside. Snowflake rose shakily to her feet and turned to look at the foal in Andi’s lap. She nudged it with her nose, softly at first, then more vigorously when it didn’t move. She let out a heartbreaking whinny as Andi covered the body with a blanket. Tears had blurred her vision to the point that she couldn’t see anymore.

The one thought that rang through her head was, I couldn’t save it. 


Andi couldn’t remember what else had happened from the night before. All she remembered was waking up in her bed with the rain beating against her window. Fitting weather for a day like this. 

Now, she stood in front of the little mound of fresh dirt under a tree in the field. The rain that had been so horrible the night before had slowed to a drizzle. She didn’t know how long she had been standing there, but it was long enough for her to get soaked. Footsteps sounded behind her, and she felt a hand land on her shoulder.

¨I couldn’t save it, Chad. I couldn’t save it.¨ Andi felt tears trickling down her face, warming her cheeks. A warmth she didn´t deserve. 

¨There was nothing you could have done, Andi. It was too soon, and in this weather, any foal could have died.¨

She looked up at her older brother as she said, ¨You could have saved it. I know you could have! I just wasn´t good enough.¨

¨I´m not sure I could have.¨ Chad looked Andi in the eyes. ¨Some things are just meant to happen. For some reason, God wanted this foal to die, and nothing I, or anybody else could have changed that.¨

Andi flung herself at her brother as she burst into tears. ¨It’s not fair!¨

¨Life wasn´t meant to be fair, but we have to live on anyway. Do you think you can do that for me?¨

She nodded her head and mumbled against his chest, ¨I´ll try.¨

¨Good. Now I know a mare that could use comforting right now. You think you can help her? She just lost her foal, you know.¨ 

Andi nodded, and with Chad leading her, the two of them headed towards the barn and one sorrowful horse. 

Why must sorrow always come with the storm? 

1 comment:

  1. I love the title and the pic you chose! Some of the parts are funny and light-hearted, but you were also able to write the sad parts. Good job!

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