Trust and obey Part Two

by Claire M.

Chapter Seven: How long?
           
A few weeks later, Melinda stood on the porch and waited impatiently for the buggy to drive into the yard. Kate was coming home today. Father had gone to San Francisco to get her after Aunt Rebecca had sent him a letter. Melinda wasn’t quite sure what that letter contained, but she was too happy to care. All that mattered was that Kate would be home at last. And then everything will be back to normal.
            The rattling of wagon wheels a minute later jerked Melinda’s head in the direction the noise was coming from. Sure enough, it was Father and Kate on their way home. Melinda was so excited that she almost forgot to tell the rest of the family that they were here. “Mother, they’re back!” she called.
Her whole family came on the porch and stood beside her. Melinda’s smile faded when they were close enough to see their facial expressions. She could see Kate’s red and angry face as she talked to Father. Kate was mad that she was coming home?
            The buggy came to a halt right in front of the house. Father helped Kate out and looked at her sternly. “Now you go to your room, I will deal with you later.” Melinda couldn’t have been more shocked when she saw Kate stomp her foot at Father. She watched as Kate, sobbing and angry, fled to the house with a bang of the door. Melinda turned back to Father who was shaking his head and sighing.
            “Elizabeth, she must be taught to mind us,” he said very sadly.
Had Kate argued and yelled at Father the whole ride home? Melinda wondered. She knew how much Kate could complain, and how much she hated when Kate did complain. Sometimes, Kate would complain the whole walk across the school yard. Or if she went riding with Melinda, she would complain about how hot it was, or how dusty it was, or how dry it was, or how it wasn’t shady enough, and the list went on and on and on.
            “She will be, James. We just need to give her more time. It’s not easy being the oldest girl. One day, Katherine will realize the wrong she has done.”  
Melinda agreed with Mother’s reasoning. She’ll be sorry alright, one day. The only question is, when will she realize? In ten years? Melinda hoped it wouldn’t be that long.

Chapter Eight: Will it Ever Stop?                                                                                                 
           
Melinda huffed as she lifted the saddle onto Coco’s back. “Coco, this has been, without a doubt, the worst month of my life.” Coco snorted in reply. “I mean it! You don’t know how bad it’s been.” She sighed. “Kate won’t do anything but complain and everything is, ‘San Francisco this’ or ‘San Francisco that’. You’d think that everything that ever happened in the world happened in San Francisco.”
            “Melinda! Hurry up! Nobody in San Francisco moves as slow as you do.” Kate’s impatient call came.
Melinda rolled her eyes. “See what I mean, Coco?” she muttered in her pony’s ear. “She complains and she compares everything here to everything in San Francisco.” Aloud she hollered back: “I’m coming!” She led her pony out into the yard.
            “Oh Melinda, if I knew you were going to ride that pokey old pony, I wouldn’t have come.” She sniffed her disdain at Melinda’s mount.
Melinda clenched her fists. “What else would I have ridden? You know my horse, Panda, isn’t ready to be ridden yet.”
Kate rolled her eyes.   “Ugh, whatever, just get on Coco and let’s go.”
Melinda didn’t enjoy the ride much that day. Kate kept on complaining about how nothing on the Circle C ranch was as exciting as it was in the city. “It’s too quiet here.” She grumbled.
“You call mooing cattle, squawking chickens, and whinnying horses ‘quiet’? How loud must San Francisco be?” Melinda wrinkled her nose. If it was any louder than a ranch, then she didn’t want to be there.
“San Francisco has a different sort of a sound. It has the sound of adventure, excitement, and fun, unlike this old ranch which is so predictable.” She sniffed.
“This ranch has its own share of adventure and unpredictability these days,” Melinda said under her breath. I wish we could all be one big, happy family again. I hate all this complaining, auguring, and bickering, will it ever stop?

Chapter Nine: Out of the Frying Pan…
           
“Do you want to go for a ride, Melinda?”
Melinda nearly dropped the book she was reading at the tone of her sister’s voice. Kate voice was almost… pleasant.  No, it was pleasant. She was sure she had heard her sister wrong. “What was it you asked?” Kate would probably be impatient at her question, but she had to be certain that what she had heard was real. But Kate’s reply wasn’t impatient… or anything close to it.
            “I asked if you would like to go riding with me. It’s a beautiful day.
It’s real all right. “Sure, big sister. I’d love to take a ride.”
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            Melinda hadn’t enjoyed herself as much as she did that night in months. Kate had been pleasant and cheerful all throughout the ride and even through supper. At one point during the meal, Melinda had glanced over at Kate and saw a dreamy look in her eye. As soon as Kate caught her gaze, she gave her a huge smile.
Melinda hadn’t thought anymore about that dreamy look, she had probably just been thinking about what a nice time she had in the city. The days went on and Kate remained pleasant. Melinda enjoyed every moment spent with her sister, and often thought about how everything was changing for the better. Everything is back to normal at last!

Chapter Ten: And Into the Fire.
           
“Justin, can I come in?” Melinda peeped into her oldest brother’s room. She needed answers and she knew Justin was the only one who could give her those answers. Father was furious at Kate, for a reason that Melinda didn’t know. He was downstairs confronting her right now. Melinda could hear Father’s exasperated voice drifting up to the second story of the house.
            When Justin lifted his head, she could see that her brother looked worn out and sad. “Sure, Honey.” He motioned her to sit down. “Now, what was it you wanted to talk to me about?”
Melinda was sure Justin already knew what it was she wanted to ask, but she went ahead and asked anyway. “What’s happening to our family? Why is Father so furious? Why is Mother so worried? Why are you so quiet? Why is Kate so upset? And why does Chad look like he wants to throw someone in the horse trough?”
            Justin sighed. “I honestly don’t know what will become of our family. Father is furious because Kate deeply hurt him. Mother is worried because she is afraid of what will happen to Katherine. I am so quiet because I am thinking. Kate is upset because she isn’t getting her own way. And Chad looks like he wants to throw someone in the horse trough because he probably does.”
            Melinda swallowed her surprise at her brother’s blunt answer. Chad was usually the one who was blunt, not Justin. “Justin, that doesn’t tell me anything! How did Kate hurt Father? What does Mother think will happen to Kate? Why are you thinking so much? What is it that Kate wants her own way about? And who does Chad want to throw in the horse trough?”
            Justin stood up and walked over to the window. Melinda watched him stare out of it. Finally, Justin turned back to face her. “I don’t know if I should tell you what Kate has been up to,” he said doubtfully.
            “Oh please Justin! Just because I am the youngest—well, baby Andrea is the youngest, but she is too little to understand—nobody tells me anything,” she said, exasperatedly. “She’s my sister, too. I should know.”
            Justin remained silent for a moment and Melinda was afraid that even her oldest brother wouldn’t tell her anything. She hadn’t tried to ask anyone else what was going on. Everyone else was handling this much worse than Justin. But finally, Justin nodded his head slowly. “You’re right, sis. You are old enough and she is your sister so you should know.” He paused a moment, then he began.
            “As you know, Kate ran off to Aunt Rebecca’s and Father let her stay a little while. A couple of weeks ago, Aunt Rebecca sent us a letter saying that Kate had fallen in with dishonorable company—or something like that—and that Father needed to come and get her right away,” Justin finished with a sigh.
            Melinda thought for a moment. “So that’s why she was mad at Father, and that’s why she has been grumpy and complaining for the last month or so.”
            “Yes,” Justin agreed. “But there’s more. Today when Mother went to town, one of her friends asked her why she was allowing her daughter to be in the company of a man by the name of Troy Swanson. Mother reassured her that she must be mistaken, but her friend insisted that this Troy Swanson had told her he was going to see Kate. Mother’s friend said she had seen him leaving town and she asked him where he was off to. He had replied that he was going to see Katherine Carter, and that Mrs. Carter had invited him over. Mother knew that she had never invited anyone to see Kate so she rushed home to find out if it was true that Katherine really was meeting a young man. She explained to Father what she had heard, and he was boiling mad. And, well you know the rest. Father is talking to Kate right now. The last thing I heard before trudging upstairs was that Kate had owned up to it when she was cornered, but she didn’t sound the least bit sorry.” Justin shook his head at the last part.
            Melinda had been holding her breath the entire time that Justin had said all of this. It was too hard to believe it all could happen to her family. “Oh Justin, this is awful.” A tear trickled down her cheek. “We’re losing Kate. She doesn’t want us anymore.”
            “It looks that way, Honey.” Justin agreed. “But all of what I just told you is not the worst part, sis.” Justin trailed off. Melinda waited for him to continue speaking, but he didn’t.
            “Justin, what is the worst part? What else is wrong?”
            “The young man she is sneaking off with is no good. He’s the worst drunkard in all of Millerton or most anywhere in California.” Justin bit his lip.
            Melinda’s hand flew to her mouth. “Oh Justin.” She couldn’t find any other words to say. How could Kate do this to us?
            Justin nodded. “It’s true. He’s shot up the saloon many times. It’s also not infrequent that he’s in jail.”
            “Jail? You mean he’s an outlaw?” Melinda shuddered. An outlaw for a brother-in-law would mean lots of trouble for her family.
            “You could call him that,” he said with a sigh. “I wish I could say that was all that was no good about him, but I can’t.” Justin paused. “Kate isn’t the only girl he’s ever made love to.”
            Melinda’s eyes opened wide. She felt like she couldn’t breathe and that in all the world, there wasn’t enough air for her. “You mean…” Melinda just couldn’t go on, she felt sick.
            “That’s exactly what I mean. Kate isn’t the first victim of his scheme to get girls. This Troy Swanson is pretty handy with the ladies.”
            That was all Melinda could take. The steady stream of tears from earlier now became a fountain. “Oh Justin! Are we going to lose Kate’s love forever? What are we supposed to do?”
            It looked as though Justin might cry too. “I wish I had an answer about how Kate is going to deal with us, but I honestly don’t know. There is only one thing I can be certain off during these times that everything is changing, is that God never changes. And neither does what He wants us to do. He wants us to come to Him. He wants us to pray. We must pray, Melinda, we must pray that no matter what happens, His will would be done and that glory would be brought to His name.”

Chapter Eleven: Goodbye, Mindy
           
Melinda pounded up the ladder to the loft of the barn. Tears blurred her vision as she madly dashed up to the top. What’s happening to our family? I don’t want  this to go on anymore! God, haven’t we had enough? She plopped down in the hay and started crying as hard as she possibly could. Tears streamed down her face and she rocked back and forth against the pain of this last and worst thing of all the things Kate had done. She opened her hand and read the letter one more time.

Dear Father, Mother, and the Rest,
           
I am a grown woman and old enough to do as I please without anyone telling me what to do. I am free to make my own choices and that is just what I will do. I want all of you to know that no one in all of California treats anyone as bad as you have treated me. I never, ever want to see any of you again. I know you’ll never want to see me again either, and of that I am very glad.

Free at Last,
Kate
           
Melinda crumpled the letter into a tight ball and chucked as far as she could across the room. “I never want to see you again either, Kate!” she screamed. She didn’t care if anybody heard. The rest of the family was inside grieving together. Melinda wanted to be alone so she could think and scream. She was done being patient and waiting for things to get back to normal; Kate had hurt her too much.
It wouldn’t have been so bad if Kate hadn’t been so nice during her last two weeks of being with them. How could anyone be so unloving as to hurt Mother and Father and the rest of us this way? How could she betray us like this? She is family and how can family hurt so bad?
Kate had ruined their life and Melinda was sure of it. She had run off, hid secrets, faked love for them, and now she was running away, hoping never to see them again. Melinda continued to let the tears flow long and hard. She sniffed.
            And then it occurred to her, she had just been blaming God for everything. “Oh dear Jesus, please, please forgive me, I just don’t want this anymore. Please, make the hurt go away, but only if it is Your will. Amen,” she prayed.
            Oh, I hope I am never this rebellious. I can’t stand the thought of making Mother cry, or making Father broken. Melinda suddenly took deep thought into everything she had ever done that made Mother displeased. The worst thing she could think of was her love for doing un-lady like things. I don’t EVER want the love for those things to get so strong that I would rather do them than listen to God, Mother, or Father.
She thought some more. Kate did the things she loved so much that she didn’t want to listen to those who knew what was best for her. Suddenly, Melinda suddenly realized that she wasn’t all that much different from Kate and that she let her passions drive her. That needed to be stopped. She had to turn back before it was too late. She needed to be what Mother and Father wanted her to be before she decided she needed to be what she wanted to be. The thought made her cry, and yet, all at once make her feel better because she knew that was what was right.
I need to end this before it gets out of hand like it did for Kate. I need to say goodbye to my old ways. I need to be who I should be, which is Melinda Carter. I need to say ‘goodbye, Mindy’.

(Not) The End
This story is concluded in Andrea Carter and the Family Secret

33 comments:

  1. Ohhhhhhhh goodness, Claire! *sobs* Th-this was so wonderful and heartbreaking--all at the same time! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!
    It was everything I had hoped it would be.
    YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE STORIES!!!!!!!
    ~Gracie~

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    1. Thank you sooo much, Gracie! 😃 Oh great, now I am going to have to write MORE fan fictions. That's the problem, when you write one someone wants you to write more. 😋 Did the story really make you cry? Was the emotional scene that good (I didn't think it was)? I don't really understand what people say is so wonderful about this story. Was it the style, the story topic? Thanks for all the help you were in helping me get past the stuck parts!!! I couldn't have done it without you (well maybe I could've, if people were willing to wait a couple extra months)!!! 😊
      -Claire

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    2. No, you GET to write more fan fic stories! :P :D
      OF COURSE I CRIED!!!! AND YES!!!!! The emotional scene was TERRIFIC!!!!!!
      Girrrrrrrl, you don't know what everyone loves about the story???? M'girl, it's EVERYTHING!!!
      The writing style was AMAZING!!!!!!!! Beautiful!!!!! The humor *dies laughing because Andi is just too cute*. THE PLOT!!!!!! The fact that Melinda would give up all her adventures just so she would never grieve her parents--*sobs all over again*--NOW I ABSOLUTELY love Melinda (I've always loved her--just not as much as I do now :D <3)
      Oh, and you're welcome for helping you :D. That's what long lost sisters are for, am I right? (Don't answer that question *glares*).
      There are literally no words enough to describe the magnificence of this story!!! <33333
      ~Gracie~

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    3. Aww... thanks again, Gracie! I hoped the scene would be sad enough for someone to cry, though I didn't think it would be. 🙂 I am soo glad you liked the plot I chose! I am also glad you like Melinda more now, because in my opinion, Melinda is one of the most interesting (or mysterious, which probably makes her interesting) people in Andi's family. 🙂 I suddenly realized just how little we knew about Melinda and decided she needed to hit the spotlight too (in reading, I had also seen hints that Melinda wasn't as lady like as she seems, like when she smacked Daniel when he tried to drown that kitten). 😃 I am super glad you liked it! :)
      -Claire

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  2. Claire, you are immensely talented!!! Assuredly, this story was incredibly and masterfully written, you did a remarkable job!!!!! Thank you so much for sharing your gifts with us, keep up the stellar work!
    -Oogster

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    1. Aww, thanks! 😊 Thank you for helping me with the title and encouraging me along the way! 😃
      -Claire

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    2. Of course! It was an honor to assist you even in a small way as you penned this masterpiece!!
      -Oogster

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  3. I LOVE it, Claire!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It was AMAZING!! :D
    Little Andi is so cute ;-)
    Now I need to go read Family Secret again! ;D

    Please keep writing! ;-) I look forward to reading more from you! ;-) ;D

    ~R

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    1. Thanks so much, Rhoda! 😊 I am so glad you like little Andi and thank you for helping me to find a place for her in this story! 😃 Thank you for giving me ideas for a funny scene (this story would be just too hard to read without one) and for motivating me along the way!
      -Claire

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  4. I love the plot it seems to fit well with Family Secret. Also that makes me think that is why Malinda is grown up when we see her in the books. I love the story and as I said before Little Andi is immensely adorable.

    ~Linda

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    1. Thank you so much! 😃😃 I am glad you think this story helps you see Melinda in a different light. I think out of all the children in the Carter family, Melinda is the least explained and she should be because she is a perfect lady...or is she. 😉
      -Claire

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  5. Wow, this story both touched and moved me. You did a fabulous job of "showing, not telling." I felt as if I was right there with the characters and experiencing everything they did. 😊 *gives you two thumbs-up* Amazing job! It's a perfect tie-in for Family Secret. 😊
    PLEASE KEEP WRITING! I love your style and look forward to reading more by you. 🤗
    p.s. That ending where you explained why Melinda no longer goes by "Mindy" was great. I've always wondered about her mysterious nicknames. 😉

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    1. Yay, I am so glad you liked it Ellen! 😃 I am glad you think I showed and didn't tell! 🙂
      -Claire

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  6. I can't beleave this is your first fanfic?! It' wonderful and so sad at the same time. Beautifully wrote! Please keep writing story's! *claps again* 🤗😊

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    1. Thanks! Yes this is my first fan fic, but I have been thinking about how I would write a fan fic for a long time. 😃 I hope to write more (I already have 2 more ideas)! 😃
      -Claire

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  7. It's one of the best Fan Fiction story I've read!


    M&M

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    1. Is it really that good (I don't think it is)? But I am glad you enjoyed it anyway! 😃
      -Claire

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  8. You should definitely enter the big story writing contest this fall!!!!!!!! You have an excellent chance too win (I think)!
    CAITLYN

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    1. Aww, thanks! That's so sweet Caitlyn! 😃 I am planning to enter it if I can come up with something to write about. 😊 I am glad you enjoyed reading my story! 😃 Your story is great too!
      -Claire

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  9. Wonderful job! And even if you don't think it's that great, is IS, Claire! I'm pretty sure some (if not most) authors tend to judge their work more harshly than those who read their work. I know I do. It really is good; keep writing!

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    1. Thanks Martha!!! 😃 I am glad other people enjoy it, even if I don't all that much. 😃 I do plan to keep writing as I have 2 more unused ideas. 😊
      -Claire

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  10. Ahhhh this was soooooo good!!!! Your writing style is great! The plot was amazing! I love how you pieced it all together!!!!

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    1. Thanks soooo much Lanae!!! 😀😀😀
      -Claire

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  11. That was sooo awesome!!! Great job at filling in the blank with this story. I love it!
    -Maria

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    1. Thanks Maria! 🙂 I am glad you think I did justice to the blank spot! 😊
      -Claire

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  12. I never imagined ‘Mindy’ as a tomboy!!! She’s exactly like Andi!😊

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    1. I never imagined Melinda that way either until I read The Last Ride for the first time a couple of years ago! 😊 In that book Melinda mentioned that Daniel had come over and almost drowned a cat *shudders*. Melinda said she slapped him good for that (good for her!). 😃 At first I thought: Hmm... would Melinda really do that? Recently, that idea kept coming to mind. I finally decided that Melinda maybe wasn't as much of a lady as we thought she was, so I decided I wanted to write about the "Mindy" she used to be. 😊😊
      -Claire

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  13. That is an amazing conclusion! This is such a touching story. You've officially made Melinda more than the big sister that does everything perfect. I see her differently now that you've turned the focus full on her. You've made me want to spend more time in Melinda's head. You have such a gift, please keep writing.

    - Emily

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    1. Aww, that's so sweet Emily! 😃 This story also made me see Melinda differently. Before now, I just thought she was the boring, (no offence, Mrs. M) practically perfect older sister. I suddenly realized all the Carter children have something special about them except for Melinda.
      Justin: The oldest, a lawyer, & head of the family; Chad: The hot-headed boss of the ranch; Mitch: Easy-going, loyal, & falls for sweet talk; Kate: Ran away and is independent & head-strong; Melinda: A lady; & Andi: Well, we all know Andi. 😉
      I decided that Melinda needed something to make her a little more interesting too.
      I do plan to write more. 😊 Thanks again Emily! 😃😃
      -Claire

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  14. This is a wonderful pre book story! I love this Claire! You show a great understanding of the past books, and I love how smoothly this story read. Great emotions are protrayed through the characters!
    I also loved how you wrote about Melinda bring similar to Kate. It was really interesting when she realized how her passions could drive her, and she needed to stop. Great morals!
    A wonderful story! Thank you so much!

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    1. Thank you so much Leah!!!!! I am SUPER glad you enjoyed reading it!!! 😃😃😃😃😃
      -Claire

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  15. I absolutely love this story!!! I don't have the words to tell how much I love this. The details are so amazing!! I love the part with little Andi! I was laughing so hard! This also was so hart melting. I am still crying inside and a read it an hour ago! I hope you keep writing for the rest of your life because you have amazing talent!!!!

    -Essie

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    1. Oh wow, thanks so much!!! :D :D Another Andi fan suggested that I include Andi in the story and told me how to make her fit into it. :) I'm so glad that Andi fan told me that. I am SUPER glad you found this story emotional, because I think that is a very important part to all stories. I didn't know that the emotion would have such a lasting effect!!!! :) I am not sure if I will write the rest of my life, but I am glad to know that people seem to think that a very good option for me. :D Thanks so much for your encouraging words, Essie!!!! :) I got another story idea (actually a couple) so you will probably be reading more from me in the future!!! :D :D ;)
      -Claire

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